Comments for Katie's proposal

Hi Katie,

After reading your proposal, I know that you have done much work for the research. You've already diagnose the problems with the OSP website, and you've clarified which specific theories will be adopted. So you got those weapons, and the proposal was to explain how to use the weapons. That's good.

I think you also did well in the research design part, which explained the specific steps of usuability testing. And I was impressed by your tight time schedule. It's good to finish things ahead of time. And I will suggest you take more time to refine your paper since you will have several months before May.

And here I have a suggestion for the current situation part, which begins with the introduction to some scholars' research. I think it may be more attractive to the readers, if you exhibit the connection between their theories and your research topic immediately in that part. Otherwise, the readers might be a little confused about what those theories have to do with this study. Though you've know the logic behind the argument, but the readers need easier and clearer explanation.